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Essays Illustrating Revision

Essays Illustrating Revision
The essays in this section present the work of four different writers for whom revision is key.



Kim Stafford, "Another Way of Writing: The Writer/Teacher as Professional Eavesdropper"
Stafford's most recent revision of this essay is in Part II of our anthology. It is interesting to compare it to this earlier version, also published. Which opening do you prefer?


Maureen Stanton, Two drafts of "Water" When it was first published, Stanton's piece included an ending that she deleted in subsequent publications of the work. She discusses this revision in her interview with Sondra Perl in the "Interviews with Writers in this Book" section of this Web site.

First Ending
"And I swim. I remember my life and it seems to me, underwater, what has happened was purposeful. I go back to my childhood and I remember my birth, hypnotized. I am a fish, swimming from my little stream out into the big ocean, and sometimes, I am scared."

Second Ending:
"I rub the lotion into her skin, and add more, basting, and coating and moving my hand all over her back without taking it off, like her back was a Ouija board and my hand, moving mysteriously, would reveal something to me. I start to cry, silently, tears streaming down my face, and she reaches around and touches my arm and says, "There, there."


Mimi Schwartz: Three Drafts of "Sultan and the Red Honda"
Mimi shares three drafts to show how she revised this short essay over time.

First Draft
Second Draft
Third Draft


Mary Elizabeth Pope: "Composing Teacher Training"
Pope's discussion of revision refers to her essay, "Teacher Training"


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